its all pretty good
pretty good for your first dnb track
im hearing what sounds like compression problems with some of your sounds, espeically your swells and reverb hits
the drumbeat worked just fine, but i dont think anyone will be asking for it, as it is really just too simple, nothing really wrong with it though
the repitition is my biggest problem, i wish the vocals had been sliced mabye rearranged or mabye glitched up a little bit, they sound untouched, and it def. steals away from your creative potential when you do that
plus the vocals just keeeeeeeeeeep going, the listener never gets a rest from them
i think just the "chocolate rain" sample and mabye one or two verses would have been better, you could have opened yourself up much more to creating your own melodies you go along with tay zondays melody
i like your choice of instruments, although i dont like your bass, it sounds like the same cookie cutter dnb stuff that i hear all the time, which honestly, i should expect from a first time dnb person, so i wont dwell on it too much
the swells you use are very loud and blaring, they def. should be toned down when you add on to this, they steal away from the track alot
i love the original song, and i think this is a good remix, although it has some execution issues
lol in the end it sounds like hes saying cocklet rain, not chocolate
anyways ima end this review
all in all, pretty good, but could be better
4/5
7/10
peace out
SessileNomad